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Bleach: Trial

The story was really good until you got to the part where Rangiku told Toshiro she first met Gin when he gave her that dried persimmon. The whole point of this fic is that Rangiku and Gin are Toshiro’s parents, but that small part clicked against everything. I understand that you wanted to stick with canon, but thinking the fact they were just children when they first met and had life before that and Rangiku had child? Umm, no. Even though souls can be extremely old, because the aging system, Rangiku having a child when she, herself was a child doesn’t seem plausible.

Yes, it is plausible. The fact Gin refers to himself and Rangiku as children in the story does not mean they were not old enough to have a child of their own. There is such a thing as teenage pregnancy, where anyone whose under the age of eighteen has a child. Gin and Rangiku at the time of the persimmons where very young, but physically they were preteens or young teens much in the same manner Toshiro is now. They simply need to have hit puberty.

During the scene where Gin is shown giving Rangiku persimmons you see only the upper half of her, but the viewer is able to see she’s developed in the chest area. That’s a sign that at this point in time she’s hit puberty. The question comes up whether or not Gin actually hit puberty or not. That is the deciding factor on whether this is possible or not. Physically Gin is the same age Toshiro is now, and since Toshiro is either just about to hit puberty, or has just hit puberty, the same can be held for Toshiro.

Yes, it is possible for Toshiro to have a child. The real reason I think this upset the reader is because this touches upon the subject of teenage pregnancy. Fact, Rangiku and Gin did not have any positive influences in their lives like Toshiro does, so they had no one to explain how to properly pursue a relationship with each other, or where boundaries lie. Another fact, this is a hundred years before our time where people did marry as young as Rangiku and Gin are.

I could possibly say this is the fault of me not adding author’s notes, but I also assumed people were aware Rangiku and Gin were at least preteens at that point in time, and not six year old kids. I mean, Rangiku would not have already been developed in the chest if she were only six.

And even if we would pretend she HAD a child when she was a child, there should have been some marks she had given birth. It should have become obvious at least then when she joined Gotei 13 and more than likely had regular checkups at 4th Division. I don’t believe Unohana or any other doctor had let it slip and there why Rangiku should have known she was mother or at least given birth even though she didn’t remember.

Why would Unohana break patient confidentiality? It is completely possible for a woman to know they’ve given birth if they’ve lost their memories. Why? All evidence that a woman has given birth are interior, not exterior. Rangiku might believe she’s had sexual relationships with someone, but not that she’s been a mother. Unohana’s approach would have been to ask, but not push, as that is proper when someone has amnesia. She would have noted it somewhere in Rangiku’s file though.

Yet you kept pushing the idea she was innocent and didn’t remember. Plus, how that even works? How could she forget her life before? You never gave explanation to that. You just twisted that plot point to suit your story, just like when you made Rangiku admit she always thought Toshiro as her son.

Have you ever heard of amnesia, or mothers instinct? The fact Rangiku forgot she had a child would not negate the mothers instinct to protect said child. Thinking that Toshiro is her son is also not the same as knowing, and can easily be brushed off as wishful thinking. She’s not admitting to Toshiro that she knew, but that she always had a feeling he was hers.

If anything, she was his friendly coworker which you would know if you could read her character a bit, because in canon we see her flirt with Toshiro and tease. Yes, we can say there isn’t anything romantic between them if you aren’t HitsuMatsu shipper, but parent-child-love? Umm, no.

I’m suddenly thinking the writer is a Rangiku/Toshiro shipper whose displeased with the fact I turned their pairing into incest. If they’ve payed any attention to canon they would have noticed the scene where she is fukutaicho, and he third seat. I wouldn’t call pulling on his cheeks the act of a friendly coworker.

I’m also going to disagree with the idea that she’s constantly flirting with Toshiro. Teasing him, yes, but not flirting. The teasing involves her watching him squirm, and act uncomfortable when she hugs him, as he’s actually you know – acting his age. I also find it funny that this person would lambaste me for having Gin and Rangiku have a child at the same age Toshiro is, and yet they’re advocating for a pairing between Rangiku and Toshiro.

Flirting for Matsumoto is getting guys drunk on the floor to the tenth division office stripped down to their underwear, and yet we never see her do this to Toshiro. One could argue she’s going easy on him because he’s a minor, but doesn’t this go back to an earlier point? Add to this, even the filler doesn’t really cross the line from teasing a young child to get him to act his age into flirtations of the romantic short.

This isn’t about me not seeing the romance between the two because I’m not a HitsuMatsu shipper either. It’s not there, period, and is based purely on personal interpretation. I will admit here that my theory that Gin and Rangiku as Toshiro’s parents is based on personal interpretation, but I’ve got a whole lot more then Matsumoto’s hugs and squeeing at how cute her child taicho is to go by.

I’m also a tad bothered that Matsumoto thinking her child taicho is cute is construed as only possible if she had romantic feelings for him. I hate it when anybody concludes that a certain reaction is only possible via romantic feelings, when in real life this isn’t true. If the logic means everybody would be bonking each other, then it’s actually not proof of romantic feelings. Feel free to interpret it that way, but don’t go forcing your interpretations on other people.

Also, did you just make Ukitake call Rangiku as ‘Ran-chan’? Ukitake has only called Toshiro such a friendly name (Shiro-chan).

Why can’t Ukitake have pet names for other characters? The fact we only see Toshiro called by a nickname doesn’t mean there aren’t others. This also said, I do believe that there is a point in time in the series when he called Byakuya by a nickname. He’s also talking to Gin there, trying to make Gin feel more comfortable about spilling the beans.

You also made Byakuya gossiping person which he isn’t. He hadn’t any reason to tell Renji Toshiro just lost it at captains’ meeting, because that isn’t ‘noble’ or sort of, so Byakuya was a bit OOC in there.

As told by Renji to another person, thus his re-accounting of what his taicho said isn’t accurate. What Byakuya was ranting about was Gin, and very briefly mentioned the fact this caused the young taicho to become quite upset. Ranting also isn’t the right word for what Byakuya was doing.

Not to mention Toshiro…I put past his actions the whole time, until that whole Rangiku-part. You made Toshiro more brat than he was, emphasizing he is child WHOLE THE TIME. Only once you made clearly he wasn’t by Gotei 13’s standards, but otherwise you kept making him a child. Toshiro is cool and composed person who wouldn’t keep pressing matter like you made in Gin’s case. Plus even though it would shock anyone, people who they thought they knew had been lying to them whole the time, Toshiro would have eventually approached the situation by logic and more composed manner instead just yelling and acting petty manner which you made him once Gin had made his revelation. That was OOC with Toshiro.

Wow.

Yet another person who likes seeing Toshiro the way they want to see him, and not how he really is.

Mind you, this is coming from a Toshiro/Rangiku fan, and I’ve only come across a small handful who will actually admit that Toshiro is at this point in time a child, and thus address this in some manner in their stories. They’re pretty good writers to, and I’ve read their stories.

Still, Toshiro’s a child. It makes me really sick and tired when people try to treat child geniuses as mini adults who will constantly act like adults. Toshiro has been shown to lose it within canon, even up into the 1000 Year arc. So no, that’s not accurate. Nor is the idea that Toshiro wouldn’t push the matter. That’s actually what an adult whose acting cool and composed would do in said situation. That is in other words the logical thing to do.

And of course he’s going to get really upset at what Gin just said. I wouldn’t call it petty though, or say he was acting like a brat. It’s rather disappointing that the reader ascribed such words to Toshiro, as that implies he was being selfish at that point in time. I wouldn’t call anyone, whether they were an adult or child a brat, or acting in a petty manner if they found out what he did, and reacted the way he did. That’s just cruel, and rude.

Toshiro has every right to act the way he did in the story I wrote, so please don’t act like he didn’t. Not the best behavior, but he still has the right to let off some steam somehow, as that is healthy.

Not to mention you ended this one-shot kind of into a wall…we never got closure about Gin’s trial even though the name was ‘trial’. I understand you wanted to make this one-shot’s point about that, Gin and Rangiku were Toshiro’s parents and he learned about that, but it would have been nice if there had been proper closure what happened to Gin.

Nice, but not necessary. I actually left this open to interpretation for my readers. One of the things this does is hopefully encourage them to write their own stories.

In the long run I’ve decided to delete this anonymous review. It felt to much like the writer was trying to hide behind anonymous status so I couldn’t retort. There is also a ship-slant here, and I try to keep my reviews free of such material because the real reason behind the review is typically to trash the fact someone isn’t using their OTP, and if someone is going to do that, they should have at least the common decency to sign in.

I’d let it through at first because I hadn’t noticed the OTP rant.

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Pokemon: Bulbatoe

Today I got an anonymous review which equates to ‘how not to get your favorite writer to update what you want them to update‘. Bulbatoe is a Pokemon one-shot I wrote recently for someone’s Yuletide wish this year, and yet here is one of the reviews I got.

Kaito1412:Can you please finish some of your other stories before you start another.I am a real big fan of your hitsukarin stories.I have been waiting a long time for you to update   red and white,cage package,diamond treasure,understanding ll ,negirau   that I don’t like your other stories you are one of my favorite   let me know in an update of your next story if you are going to do it or not.I wil still read your   it just gets me so mad when you really get into a story and the other doesn’t want to continue or if they forgot about it.

There are actually quite a few issues with this particular review. The first thing which jumped out at me was the last part which reads…

it just gets me so mad when you really get into a story and the other doesn’t want to continue or if they forgot about it

You the reader do not know what is going on in said writer’s life, so you do not know why they are not continuing said story at that point in time. The reason I’ve not updated a lot of my stories recently has nothing to do with the fact I don’t want to continue these stories, or that I forgotten them, but that recently I’ve had to deal with some major things going on offline that has a negative effect on my writing schedule.

I’ve also got to deal with the fact my mind bounces all over the place with tons of ideas. For those of you who think having some disorder which allows the writer to super focus on a task is great – this is actually one of the major downsides to having such a disorder. It has ways of backfiring.

Second thing I noticed was this review wasn’t even left on a story for the Bleach fandom! It was also left on a one-shot I wrote for a specific challenge/contest/event, which in turn is a way to help me refocus on my bigger projects, or at least most of the time. It’s part of how my writing process works. Most of all though, the real reason they posted on said story is because Bulbatoe is the latest story I posted, and this was for the holidays.

But there is a third issue I noticed.

I am a real big fan of your hitsukarin stories.I have been waiting a long time for you to update   red and white,cage package,diamond treasure,understanding ll ,negirau   that I don’t like your other stories

Thank you for making it clear the only reason you like my stories is because of the pairing and were able to get your latest fix for said pairing, and not because you actually like the stories I wrote.

At least that’s the way that particular comment reads.

First, I’ve actually posted quite a few stories for this pairing which are clearly marked for this pairing. Many are one-shots and short stories for the most part, and are the type of thing which are meant to help tie over readers when a writer’s not actually able to update their other stories of the same type.

Second, there is one story though I published recently which was my NaNoWriMo project for this year, which tends to be one of the major offline things which gets in the way of me updating, but is also very important to me. Cancer is a piece I’m working on which is clearly marked as containing this pairing. One of the major differences between the five they listed and Cancer is you know you’re going to get a happy ending when you read the summaries of the other stories, but for Cancer you know there is a chance there may not be a happy ending for the couple. Said reader though isn’t willing to give the story a chance to find out though.

Third, if they actually bothered to read the stories I’ve written which aren’t marked for the pairing they would know a lot of my stories feature the pairing due to the fact I like the dynamics said pairing adds to the stories I write. I’m actually a genfic writer, not a shipfic writer. That means ships will take a back seat to writing out the plot for a given story, and if the plot doesn’t allow said pairing to occur, it doesn’t happen.

This doesn’t though mean said pairings don’t occur in these stories, and one of the things which really bothers us genfic writers is that when a person knows that we favor a particular pairing they don’t try bothering to read the stuff where the pairing they’re looking for isn’t marked. Yes, in some cases the major events for said pairing isn’t going to happen until the third in a series, but a well written pairing isn’t rushed, and a writer takes their time getting to the good parts. And in some cases, like with Christmas Nightmare, we have a story where the pairing is there in the first story, but the reader’s got to be patient enough to allow the pairing to show through. Other readers would also love to see these stories updates to, and yet this one reader wants favoritism.

Truth be told it’s like watching Bleach, and waiting for the episodes for Toshiro and Karin to show up, rather then fast forwarding to the episodes in question.

Can you please finish some of your other stories before you start another.

This is how the review started, and this is honestly how the writer of said review should have left things. I can honestly agree that it would be nice for me to finish some of the stories I already got going before I start another. That though brings into question how many, which ones, which readers do I favor over others – and also brings up the issue of how my mind unfortunately works when I write. It comes down to this.

I’d love to promise not to start anymore stories before finishing some of my older ones, but that’s just not possible. I’ve tried, and the end results was my mind going off at such a speed I can’t focus on the stories I need to finish. Thus the one-shots, and short stories are supposed to help, as well as my NaNoWriMo and other writing exercises. These provide a limiter on the stories I can start at a given time.

And before you say, “but it can’t be that hard“, I once made a list of all the story ideas I had once, and I had over two-hundred in my list, and this was back when I still had around a hundred stories published already.

In this particular case the reader crossed the line.

  1. Don’t ever act like the writer whose not updating like you want is wronging you. You the reader don’t know what’s going on. Take for example one of my favorite stories, Shinigami Kids Society by Lucanite. Sadly, I don’t think I’ll ever see an update from her, ever. In this particular case I know the writer has health issues, because she posted about it sometime between when I first discovered this lovely series, and when she made the latest update to her profile on January 13, 2011. She was so sick, she couldn’t update like she wanted. One of the stories I created since I last updated these stories, the exception being possibly one update for Red and White, is the Finding Friendship story, which is a series inspired by her work, and dedicated to her specifically. This series is actually going to feature the pairing in question, but the really good stuff’s not going to start until part three because that’s how the story worked out, and I really want this one to be good because she’s the one who inspired me to write Finding Friendship. This had been bumping around in my head for four years at least, before I got it to a point I was ready to start.
  2. Don’t review a story that has nothing to do with what you’re talking about. By this I mean a story which isn’t one of the ones in question. Posting it to a one-shot says you don’t respect the writer’s need to take a break to write a one-shot piece. (I mean, come on, it’s a one-shot, which is supposed to be a stand alone piece, and not continued.) Posting it to a story from another fandom says you don’t respect the writer’s right to write for other fandoms. Posting it in general to other stories, well, it just doesn’t respect the writer’s right to write things for that fandom outside of what you personally want. And posting it on a story they just updated? How about using a PM instead? If you don’t have an account, well, my anonymous reviews are screened. I’ve got to read all of them unless I get really sick, and rarely if ever miss them, so you don’t have to post to the story that’s just been updated. That’s just, well, rather childish.
  3. Leave your fixes out of it. Mind you, there are writers out there who do write for a particular fix because they know it will get them more reviews, reads, favorites, what ever. The serious writers though take pride in their craft, and care more about telling a good story, so if you let on that you like their stories because they feed your latest fix, you’ve actually slapped them in the face. Translation: “I care about my fix, not your actual story. Give me my fix NOW!”

In fact, I need add this note on fixes. If you’re reading for the fix, I’ve a hard time considering you a real fan of whatever your latest fix is.

Why?

I get reading everything for a particular fix. I do that for stories where Isshin is Toshiro’s former taicho, or Gin and Ran are his biological parents. I don’t though let that get in the way of discerning which of these stories are better written, or appreciating what the writer brings to the table. One writer I’ve mentored for example, forever122, wrote a ton of a adorable stories where Gin and Ran were Toshiro’s parents, but the fact they’re a young writer shows through. Last year though they wrote Wish, and this particular story jumps in quality compared to their other stories. That’s the kind of stuff writer’s want to hear about, which brings me tot he forth issue.

  1. Don’t act like the writer owes you something.
  2. Don’t post reviews to unrelated stories.
  3. Keep your fix out of it.
  4. Don’t bash the writer’s other works. Seriously, telling them you don’t like their other works, or that you won’t give them a try, how are you to tell the writer how they’ve improved? The signs of improvement are less likely to show through on an older story compared to a new or rewritten one.
  5. Keep in mind there are readers for the writers other stories. I’m one of the main writers for the stories where Isshin is Toshiro’s former taicho, or even Ran and Gin their biological parents. Most of them are mine.

Last, don’t tell me to “let you know in an update of your next story”. If this is really that important to you, then you create an account and PM me. Take also into consideration how long this reply was.

P.S. I took time out to write this reply from what I was doing. I was working on a project I wanted to finish, so I could then get back to updating older stories. Now I’ve got to get refocused on that.

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Bleach: Shogatsu & Breaking One’s Heart

Naga9000 – 6/16/15

This was rather sweet; I loved the bond shown between Rangiku and Toshiro, it is rather strong which just goes to show how close the two are.
I enjoyed reading this…

Wow! I wrote this story a long time ago. Thanks for reviewing! :)

The CritiqueP – 4/713

The CritiqueP:Ok one thing-went to your profile and I have to say this,
“Hitsugaya and and Hinamori are not technically siblings” and I say this
because they may have grown up as siblings but that does not make them
siblings. Thats like if your parents died and you moved in with your aunt and
uncle-they are not your parents even though you may look at them as parental
figures. It doesn’t mean you can’t feel like they are I’m just saying you
shouldn’t get all butt hurt over someone saying that they are childhood
friends because that is COMPLETELY true and Canon. I mean you can twist in
your favor and try and argue that because they grew up under the same “Granny”
that makes them siblings but that’s not really true but since this is
Fanfiction you can do whatever you want.
My point is that you telling people that Hinamori and Hitsugaya are not
childhood friends is both right and wrong. Toshiro often refers to Hinamori as
a childhood friend while acquaintances of the two have identified him as
Momo’s younger brother-most likely because of what Momo has said about him.
Momo treated him AS a younger brother but technically even if they are close
at the heart that does not change blood- they are NOT siblings(not really). So
either answer can be regarded as true but the most accepted-and technically
right- answer is that Momo and Hitsugaya are childhood friends who regard each
other in a brother/…

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The CritiqueP – 4/7/13

sorry meant to post that under “Breaking One’s Heart”

4/8/13

4/8/13
Ok first of all my computer has a virus so I cannot sign in as when ever I
try it says that there is an error and I’ve been forced to use a friends
laptop.
I refuse to argue this point any longer with you as I’ve already told you that
you are both right and wrong but to be honest I really think you just enjoying
arguing and thinking you are right so i’m going to leave you to it. I never
said that there needed to be a blood relation to feel like siblings but unless
there is some legal document to make this claim valid its just you feeling
close to a very good friend/confidante. (which is completely OK but just
growing up with someone doesn’t magically change the fact that you have a
different DNA make-up-you can’t just walk around claiming someone as your
sibling and not expect some odd looks when you don’t have the same parents nor
are you adopted) So it is not wrong to say that they are not siblings-it
really depends on what you view siblings as being-the creator or whoever can
say they are siblings but unless you are someone who believes being “siblings
of the heart” counts then it doesn’t really matter.
But I will leave this as it is because this debate honestly isn’t worth the
effort (go ahead and delete this if you want) I do wish you luck in the future
of writing (rock on!) :} I enjoy reading new stuff!:}:} Keep up the good work!

These reviews were posted a long time ago. Long story short someone reviewed another one of my stories and I countered their review in a PM. In said PM they started telling me I made Momo out of character and was character bashing her because she wasn’t anywhere as mean as I made her and I had everyone not trusting her as well as questioned whether she deserved the rank of fukutaicho or if Aizen put her in the rank because she was easy to manipulate.

I told the reader there was no proof she was skilled with kido. Saying she is an expert user of kido isn’t the same thing as saying she is actually a kido master, and the quote from Tite Kubo saying “the lieutenant is an expert user of kido,” is followed up by “She can look awe-inspiring sometimes.” This means she’s skilled at making her kido look flashy, and she’s good at memorizing spells, but it doesn’t mean she’s got power behind her kido.

What Kira and Toshiro says also needs to be taken with a grain of salt. Both admire Hinamori so they may exagerate the truth. Toshiro’s words were that HInamori was a master at her kido, and not that she was a master of kido or a kido master. The order of wording does matter as the meaning does change.

Add to this she’s never seen using kido well, so if she is a kido expert it is majorly an informed trait. During the battle with Matsumoto she actually messed up big time. Yes, combining various kido spells is amazing, but all of these spells were low level and were used to make up for her lack of power and other skills. As for her healing kido – Shinji does praise it, but he also despairs it as not being as good as the fourths. His exact words are, “Momo is a skilled girl, but still not as good as the 4th division.”

Momo’s also constantly messing up. She didn’t actually rescue Matsumoto during the Winter War, but instead butted in when Rangiku was trying to draw off one enemy from the other. Her attacks are only good for sneak attacks, and she’s not useful in any way but her kido. Jumping in to save Matsumoto caused a three fukutaicho to be knocked out and chances are all of them are at captain level except for their Bankai, and Hisagi did actually have Bankai despite the fact we didn’t know at the time. The old man’s words were dirrected at her. The next time she shows up she’s interupting a fight where her enemy is over powered and having to be rescued by Komamura.

So no… I still don’t think Momo’s actual fukutaicho material, and that Shinji is just babysitting her.

Well, this person wasn’t pleased with me not seeing their point of view, and they used circular reasoning and came back to an original point they made despite the fact I countered every piece of logic they used. They proceeded to sock puppet, claim they “weren’t a fan of Momo” and finally decided to create a new account giving themselves away by revealing information left in the anonymous reviews which I had purposefully never let anyone see.

(Not the whole bit about foster siblings, I did mention something on my profile for a bit.)

They proceeded to post a spoiler for a light novel and claimed that it proved Momo was fukutaicho material because Shinji approved of her. I told her

a.) The material wasn’t canon in the United States as there was no translation available, and only a summary.

b.) Even if it were canon there were contradictions I could point out.

c.) Said synopsis actually proved me right and not her as the person noted Shinji’s desparing attitude towards Momo rather then a positive one like the reviewer claimed.

She received a major lecture about providing spoilers in summaries like that, and tried telling me I was mad because she was right and that I deserved to have the light novel spoiled. (Yeah… she really said that in a PM… no, it was an anonymous review because I blocked her.) She was sort of sorry for spoiling it for my readers, but not really.

… Anyways… onto these actual reviews.

Said content had nothing to do with the actual story in question which is why they were instantly deleted. A lot of what she said in her anonymous reviewers were honestly insulting as she pretty much said you can only be siblings if you’re blood related, or if you’re adopted. Plenty of foster siblings would disagree with that as would the children who do come to call their aunt and uncle father and mother. This was the kind of logic I dealt with in the other reviews and PMs, and why I couldn’t take her seriously.

P.S. I also googled her reviews and found I wasn’t the only writer she was trying to demand changes of. If I remember correctly the other story she told the writer Ichigo and Rukia couldn’t have premarital sex. Another point of contention was how I didn’t have Toshiro act constantly like an adult despite the fact he’s still a child. (Makes me feel really bad for him right now.) This wasn’t a pleasant situation either as her behavior amounted to harassment, and while I wasn’t bothered emotionally other then to find her annoying it did take time out of my writing schedule as I had to deal with her whether it was countering her bad logic in PM, or deleting her anonymous reviews.

I hope nobody else has to deal with a reviewer like this, but chances are you will.

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Bleach: Bleach: Fan Works

7/7/15

You know, some people may not be excellent writers, because they come here to make a start for themselves and they have fun doing it. Of course they won’t be good at first. Nobody can start off good at something. I sure as hell wasn’t good at first. I think it’s terrible that you would come and make fun of these people and bash them instead of giving constructive criticism and helping them get better.

And for the love of everything holy, who cares if people like Twilight? They may be misguided by liking an abusive relationship, but they’re not hurting anyone. It’s a teenage thing. They’ll grow out of it. Just like they could grow into writing and becoming promising authors.

You really should be ashamed of yourself for making fun of your fellow man instead of helping them along. This is what’s wrong with the world.

Aren’t I making fun of myself? Each and every single one of the writers is an original character created by myself, and each story is written by myself. Constructive criticism actually isn’t the only way people can learn. Another way is satire/parody. For those willing to listen a good satire/parody piece allows those making the mistakes and those who aren’t to laugh together, or cringe together. Those who tend to over react do so because something hits home for them.

As for Twilight – I’m not actually satirizing Twilight, but the behavior of the rabid fan base known as the Twihards who give Twilighers a bad reputation. The way to fix a persons misguided behavior is to either tell them they are wrong, or find a way which hits home. Not everybody learns from being lectured, but seeing their behavior satirized/parodied does make others think twice about their behavior.

I’ve no reason to feel ashamed of myself either. I read a story, I leave critique. These are my bad fics I’m making fun of, and I’m also satirizing types of fanfic writers which tend to be a problem and not aiming at anyone specific. The only one would be Animus Rover. That one is based off a really good friend because I love him and his stories to death despite the fact I also want to bang my head against the wall at times. Sadly this also means I may end up showing favoritism towards this writer.

Lily – 7/5/15

I like Osshiko, flamer and all. Also, I like Sailor Paladin also. Will you be making Osshiko do more fanfics? And will we get to see some of Sailor Paladin’s work? I, personally, am interested in seeing this Orihime/Rukia slash story she has.

I do plan on doing more stories with Osshiko. Sailor Paladin is a bit of a problem as I’ve actually not figured out how to incorporate the Good Fic writers stories in as technically they’re what I would personally write in the first place and many would be better published as separate stories.

I guess this means I need to think up an actual slash fic for Orihime and Rukia huh?

Hatred – 4/17/15

Hahah I just skip all this s*** and go straight to what the real characters think of each fanfic. I know it’s overused, but it’d be cool if the cast of bleach finds fanfiction and comment saying this and that. In a similar fashion to this one actually, but not exacty alike… because I find this one to be confusing as hell

The name bothers me a bit. This was a major experiment on my part, so hopefully if I do another series I’ll not have as much problems. :)

7/11/13 – these stories…ARE PERFECT FOR MY ANGER MANAGEMENT! Nice job on the fanfic!

Not sure what to say, but okay. :)

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Bleach/Harry Potter: Muggle Ghosts series

Talon83 – 7/15/15

Hold on a second, Regalus Black is a soul reaper?!

Yes and no. He and his group call themselves Grim Reapers, not Soul Reapers, but they do serve the same purpose and amount to the same thing despite the different names. Good job catching on. :)

9/29/13 – Wouldn’t it be soul reaper instead of grim reaper?

Nope. You’re thinking it should be Soul Reaper because that’s the official English translation, but the official English translation does not exist in this world. Different cultures develop different names for things and Grim Reapers is the name they came up for their kind in the UK. Another is Death, but Death is more of the leader of the Grim Reapers. Let’s not forget the actual Grimm or black dog.

Gingerbread – 7/27/13

the black is Sirius’s brother, right.

Yup. Good guess. (Yeah, this is one of the secrets I don’t mind revealing as it’s pretty much revealed in another side story for this. I couldn’t wait to work with Regulus’ character. :) )

11/27/13 – hahahaha roflmao! Snapes signing the petiton was hilaryus!

Glad you found that funny. I believe – since it’s been awhile – he did it so he wouldn’t be annoyed anymore.

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Bleach – Liking Onself series

Liking Oneself – 7/19/15

Actually as a former Shinigami captain Isshin would know exactly what happens to souls taken in by hollows.

So what does happen to souls taken by hollows? What we do know is that souls taken by Hollows are used as energy, but they don’t disappear. Later on the souls fight to see who’ll win out the dominate personality. We also know they must keep eating souls or else they will lose dominance. What we don’t know is what happens after a hollow is destroyed to the other souls devoured. We do know the soul of a Hollow who hasn’t sinned gets sent onto Soul Society, so doesn’t this mean the other souls are free to? Or are they gone for good? We actually don’t know, so do the Shinigami know? If they don’t then why can’t Isshin speculate about Masaki possibly being in Soul Society and such?

P.S. Keep in mind Isshin will have already defeated Grand Fisher by the time he did his first video.

Liking Oneself II – 6/11/15

I hope someone slaps the living daylights out of the selfish selfcentered twit. she deserves it.

Momo probably does deserve a nice slap across the cheek some of the times she gets out of the hand, but she shouldn’t be beaten up.

Liking Oneself II – Tohda – 6/4/15

Glad you updated this story. I like reading most of your stories. Can’t leave a proper review because honestly, after staying for almost a year (and counting) in a country that barely speaks English, I’m already too tired to actually pinpoint grammar mistakes or the like as I am more grateful that I can finally read something in English. Not that there are much to correct in your stories and there’s really nothing negative I can say about the plot because I wouldn’t read them if the stories weren’t to my liking.

Hope you continue to update your other stories specially “Baby Care Package”, “Touchan Taicho”, “Softly Snowing II: Academy Years”, and “Secret Santa”.

Do keep writing! :)

No worries on that. I do hope to update the others soon though, though Touchan Taicho depends on a few things like getting ST up onto Wattpad so it’s easier to read, writing the next chapter and getting it to EvilHumour

Liking Oneself: De-Zombification – 8/28/14

I really hate what kubo is doing to toshiro! like seriously, why does he torture this poor kid so much! and now even matsumoto is zombiefied, w**?!

hoping for you to continue this story, I think we all need to read something comforting…

Yeah. I feel bad for Toshiro. Now as of posting this Toshiro may have his life span shortened, but that’s only if it actually is Mayuri speaking and not Toshiro. Toshiro saying “my life was cut down many times, but I’m still thankful as he saved my life”. The cutting down of lives refers to the time loop. Sadly the actual Manga volume won’t be released over here for over a year so it seems it will be over a year until confirmation. Can’t find any stories dealing with this detail yet either, but I did find a whopper of a Mary Sue when I tried looking.

Liking Oneself: De-Zombification – 8/13/14

Oh My Gosh. Did he just… s*** his pants… Seriously? Wow, as much as I LOVE your stories and always am impressed by how amazingly you write them, this made me even MORE impressed since I would never thought you’d write something like that! Congratulations! I was literally reading this part with my mouth open from a shock you served there!

I wonder what’s wrong with his brain now. He knows he’s alive, but he’s still afraid of the sun. I can understand he thinks he’s a doll, since GiGi pretty much messed his mind up with making a doll from him by creating a zombie, but being afraid of the sun? Pretty weird idea, but I trust you know what you’re doing – as you always do :)

Hoping for Matsumoto to be the new captain, you just made me believing it’s possible. Plus, the position would stay in the family and Toshiro could take over or the division would have two taichos when he recovers.

Oh! Really nice review with a ton of length. I loved the fact you noticed so many details from the story. Matsumoto being the new captain though… that’s a rather good question. That may have been my plan, but I may have someone else in mind. :)

Secrets are secrets.

Liking Oneself: De-Zombification – 8/4/15

Oooo? This story is good so far. Any updates coming up soon?

Long time, but I do hope to update soon.

Liking Oneself: De-Zombification – 8/1/14

Love the beginning of this story already and can’t wait for more. But I do wonder why is Hitsugaya drooling so much? Are some of his nerves damaged or something? Or is it a side effect of being zombiefied? Poor baby, thanks the spirits he has motherly Matsumoto by his side :)
Why the bunk beds if they’re in her house? Is it because her house is actually a room which is a replacement for her real house that was destroyed during the Quincy attack? Shouldn’t they go someplace safe? I’m not sure if he should feel safe out there, so close to the battlefield… But still, it’s really great they lives together now although I’m not sure if it’s good to degrade him from his captain position. I mean, he’s a prodigy after all. He can have both – childhood and work, right? If Matsumoto took care of the job, he’d be pretty much free and could enojoy life and childhood WITH Matsumoto still with him.
I feel the nightmares coming up and I won’t be surprised to see them really bad. Again – I’m glad Matsumoto’s with him. They share a bond deeper than any other taicho and fukutaicho and I love it. I wish they had more “screen time” in the manga.

Thanks for another story and I’m waiting for more.
Owari.
xoxo

Toshiro’s recovering his mental and physical abilities due to being turned into a zombie. Matsumoto’s place is her quarters at the tenth division which consists of one to two rooms. The place has no kitchen, and is very small size wise. Thus there is not any room for more then one bed and thus they need to stack them.

You’re also right that this is degrading for Toshiro, but is he able to understand this at this point? This isn’t to say this isn’t a worry of the adults, but right now they’re more concerned about Toshiro’s basic well being then anything else as well as getting him better.

Liking Oneself – Rawr I’m a Taco – 11/02/13

I really liked this story. It was great for a laugh, and the plot was really good. It could use a bit of work grammar-wise, but other than that, it was great. Keep up the good work in your sequel. :)

The Taco (Oh, and “Rawr I’m a Taco” is my username, I’m just too lazy to log in)

I’m glad you found the story funny and agree with the fact the grammar needs work.