Bleach: Shogatsu & Breaking One’s Heart

Naga9000 – 6/16/15

This was rather sweet; I loved the bond shown between Rangiku and Toshiro, it is rather strong which just goes to show how close the two are.
I enjoyed reading this…

Wow! I wrote this story a long time ago. Thanks for reviewing! :)

The CritiqueP – 4/713

The CritiqueP:Ok one thing-went to your profile and I have to say this,
“Hitsugaya and and Hinamori are not technically siblings” and I say this
because they may have grown up as siblings but that does not make them
siblings. Thats like if your parents died and you moved in with your aunt and
uncle-they are not your parents even though you may look at them as parental
figures. It doesn’t mean you can’t feel like they are I’m just saying you
shouldn’t get all butt hurt over someone saying that they are childhood
friends because that is COMPLETELY true and Canon. I mean you can twist in
your favor and try and argue that because they grew up under the same “Granny”
that makes them siblings but that’s not really true but since this is
Fanfiction you can do whatever you want.
My point is that you telling people that Hinamori and Hitsugaya are not
childhood friends is both right and wrong. Toshiro often refers to Hinamori as
a childhood friend while acquaintances of the two have identified him as
Momo’s younger brother-most likely because of what Momo has said about him.
Momo treated him AS a younger brother but technically even if they are close
at the heart that does not change blood- they are NOT siblings(not really). So
either answer can be regarded as true but the most accepted-and technically
right- answer is that Momo and Hitsugaya are childhood friends who regard each
other in a brother/…

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The CritiqueP – 4/7/13

sorry meant to post that under “Breaking One’s Heart”


Ok first of all my computer has a virus so I cannot sign in as when ever I
try it says that there is an error and I’ve been forced to use a friends
I refuse to argue this point any longer with you as I’ve already told you that
you are both right and wrong but to be honest I really think you just enjoying
arguing and thinking you are right so i’m going to leave you to it. I never
said that there needed to be a blood relation to feel like siblings but unless
there is some legal document to make this claim valid its just you feeling
close to a very good friend/confidante. (which is completely OK but just
growing up with someone doesn’t magically change the fact that you have a
different DNA make-up-you can’t just walk around claiming someone as your
sibling and not expect some odd looks when you don’t have the same parents nor
are you adopted) So it is not wrong to say that they are not siblings-it
really depends on what you view siblings as being-the creator or whoever can
say they are siblings but unless you are someone who believes being “siblings
of the heart” counts then it doesn’t really matter.
But I will leave this as it is because this debate honestly isn’t worth the
effort (go ahead and delete this if you want) I do wish you luck in the future
of writing (rock on!) :} I enjoy reading new stuff!:}:} Keep up the good work!

These reviews were posted a long time ago. Long story short someone reviewed another one of my stories and I countered their review in a PM. In said PM they started telling me I made Momo out of character and was character bashing her because she wasn’t anywhere as mean as I made her and I had everyone not trusting her as well as questioned whether she deserved the rank of fukutaicho or if Aizen put her in the rank because she was easy to manipulate.

I told the reader there was no proof she was skilled with kido. Saying she is an expert user of kido isn’t the same thing as saying she is actually a kido master, and the quote from Tite Kubo saying “the lieutenant is an expert user of kido,” is followed up by “She can look awe-inspiring sometimes.” This means she’s skilled at making her kido look flashy, and she’s good at memorizing spells, but it doesn’t mean she’s got power behind her kido.

What Kira and Toshiro says also needs to be taken with a grain of salt. Both admire Hinamori so they may exagerate the truth. Toshiro’s words were that HInamori was a master at her kido, and not that she was a master of kido or a kido master. The order of wording does matter as the meaning does change.

Add to this she’s never seen using kido well, so if she is a kido expert it is majorly an informed trait. During the battle with Matsumoto she actually messed up big time. Yes, combining various kido spells is amazing, but all of these spells were low level and were used to make up for her lack of power and other skills. As for her healing kido – Shinji does praise it, but he also despairs it as not being as good as the fourths. His exact words are, “Momo is a skilled girl, but still not as good as the 4th division.”

Momo’s also constantly messing up. She didn’t actually rescue Matsumoto during the Winter War, but instead butted in when Rangiku was trying to draw off one enemy from the other. Her attacks are only good for sneak attacks, and she’s not useful in any way but her kido. Jumping in to save Matsumoto caused a three fukutaicho to be knocked out and chances are all of them are at captain level except for their Bankai, and Hisagi did actually have Bankai despite the fact we didn’t know at the time. The old man’s words were dirrected at her. The next time she shows up she’s interupting a fight where her enemy is over powered and having to be rescued by Komamura.

So no… I still don’t think Momo’s actual fukutaicho material, and that Shinji is just babysitting her.

Well, this person wasn’t pleased with me not seeing their point of view, and they used circular reasoning and came back to an original point they made despite the fact I countered every piece of logic they used. They proceeded to sock puppet, claim they “weren’t a fan of Momo” and finally decided to create a new account giving themselves away by revealing information left in the anonymous reviews which I had purposefully never let anyone see.

(Not the whole bit about foster siblings, I did mention something on my profile for a bit.)

They proceeded to post a spoiler for a light novel and claimed that it proved Momo was fukutaicho material because Shinji approved of her. I told her

a.) The material wasn’t canon in the United States as there was no translation available, and only a summary.

b.) Even if it were canon there were contradictions I could point out.

c.) Said synopsis actually proved me right and not her as the person noted Shinji’s desparing attitude towards Momo rather then a positive one like the reviewer claimed.

She received a major lecture about providing spoilers in summaries like that, and tried telling me I was mad because she was right and that I deserved to have the light novel spoiled. (Yeah… she really said that in a PM… no, it was an anonymous review because I blocked her.) She was sort of sorry for spoiling it for my readers, but not really.

… Anyways… onto these actual reviews.

Said content had nothing to do with the actual story in question which is why they were instantly deleted. A lot of what she said in her anonymous reviewers were honestly insulting as she pretty much said you can only be siblings if you’re blood related, or if you’re adopted. Plenty of foster siblings would disagree with that as would the children who do come to call their aunt and uncle father and mother. This was the kind of logic I dealt with in the other reviews and PMs, and why I couldn’t take her seriously.

P.S. I also googled her reviews and found I wasn’t the only writer she was trying to demand changes of. If I remember correctly the other story she told the writer Ichigo and Rukia couldn’t have premarital sex. Another point of contention was how I didn’t have Toshiro act constantly like an adult despite the fact he’s still a child. (Makes me feel really bad for him right now.) This wasn’t a pleasant situation either as her behavior amounted to harassment, and while I wasn’t bothered emotionally other then to find her annoying it did take time out of my writing schedule as I had to deal with her whether it was countering her bad logic in PM, or deleting her anonymous reviews.

I hope nobody else has to deal with a reviewer like this, but chances are you will.


Bleach: Bleach: Fan Works


You know, some people may not be excellent writers, because they come here to make a start for themselves and they have fun doing it. Of course they won’t be good at first. Nobody can start off good at something. I sure as hell wasn’t good at first. I think it’s terrible that you would come and make fun of these people and bash them instead of giving constructive criticism and helping them get better.

And for the love of everything holy, who cares if people like Twilight? They may be misguided by liking an abusive relationship, but they’re not hurting anyone. It’s a teenage thing. They’ll grow out of it. Just like they could grow into writing and becoming promising authors.

You really should be ashamed of yourself for making fun of your fellow man instead of helping them along. This is what’s wrong with the world.

Aren’t I making fun of myself? Each and every single one of the writers is an original character created by myself, and each story is written by myself. Constructive criticism actually isn’t the only way people can learn. Another way is satire/parody. For those willing to listen a good satire/parody piece allows those making the mistakes and those who aren’t to laugh together, or cringe together. Those who tend to over react do so because something hits home for them.

As for Twilight – I’m not actually satirizing Twilight, but the behavior of the rabid fan base known as the Twihards who give Twilighers a bad reputation. The way to fix a persons misguided behavior is to either tell them they are wrong, or find a way which hits home. Not everybody learns from being lectured, but seeing their behavior satirized/parodied does make others think twice about their behavior.

I’ve no reason to feel ashamed of myself either. I read a story, I leave critique. These are my bad fics I’m making fun of, and I’m also satirizing types of fanfic writers which tend to be a problem and not aiming at anyone specific. The only one would be Animus Rover. That one is based off a really good friend because I love him and his stories to death despite the fact I also want to bang my head against the wall at times. Sadly this also means I may end up showing favoritism towards this writer.

Lily – 7/5/15

I like Osshiko, flamer and all. Also, I like Sailor Paladin also. Will you be making Osshiko do more fanfics? And will we get to see some of Sailor Paladin’s work? I, personally, am interested in seeing this Orihime/Rukia slash story she has.

I do plan on doing more stories with Osshiko. Sailor Paladin is a bit of a problem as I’ve actually not figured out how to incorporate the Good Fic writers stories in as technically they’re what I would personally write in the first place and many would be better published as separate stories.

I guess this means I need to think up an actual slash fic for Orihime and Rukia huh?

Hatred – 4/17/15

Hahah I just skip all this s*** and go straight to what the real characters think of each fanfic. I know it’s overused, but it’d be cool if the cast of bleach finds fanfiction and comment saying this and that. In a similar fashion to this one actually, but not exacty alike… because I find this one to be confusing as hell

The name bothers me a bit. This was a major experiment on my part, so hopefully if I do another series I’ll not have as much problems. :)

7/11/13 – these stories…ARE PERFECT FOR MY ANGER MANAGEMENT! Nice job on the fanfic!

Not sure what to say, but okay. :)


Bleach/Harry Potter: Muggle Ghosts series

Talon83 – 7/15/15

Hold on a second, Regalus Black is a soul reaper?!

Yes and no. He and his group call themselves Grim Reapers, not Soul Reapers, but they do serve the same purpose and amount to the same thing despite the different names. Good job catching on. :)

9/29/13 – Wouldn’t it be soul reaper instead of grim reaper?

Nope. You’re thinking it should be Soul Reaper because that’s the official English translation, but the official English translation does not exist in this world. Different cultures develop different names for things and Grim Reapers is the name they came up for their kind in the UK. Another is Death, but Death is more of the leader of the Grim Reapers. Let’s not forget the actual Grimm or black dog.

Gingerbread – 7/27/13

the black is Sirius’s brother, right.

Yup. Good guess. (Yeah, this is one of the secrets I don’t mind revealing as it’s pretty much revealed in another side story for this. I couldn’t wait to work with Regulus’ character. :) )

11/27/13 – hahahaha roflmao! Snapes signing the petiton was hilaryus!

Glad you found that funny. I believe – since it’s been awhile – he did it so he wouldn’t be annoyed anymore.


Bleach – Liking Onself series

Liking Oneself – 7/19/15

Actually as a former Shinigami captain Isshin would know exactly what happens to souls taken in by hollows.

So what does happen to souls taken by hollows? What we do know is that souls taken by Hollows are used as energy, but they don’t disappear. Later on the souls fight to see who’ll win out the dominate personality. We also know they must keep eating souls or else they will lose dominance. What we don’t know is what happens after a hollow is destroyed to the other souls devoured. We do know the soul of a Hollow who hasn’t sinned gets sent onto Soul Society, so doesn’t this mean the other souls are free to? Or are they gone for good? We actually don’t know, so do the Shinigami know? If they don’t then why can’t Isshin speculate about Masaki possibly being in Soul Society and such?

P.S. Keep in mind Isshin will have already defeated Grand Fisher by the time he did his first video.

Liking Oneself II – 6/11/15

I hope someone slaps the living daylights out of the selfish selfcentered twit. she deserves it.

Momo probably does deserve a nice slap across the cheek some of the times she gets out of the hand, but she shouldn’t be beaten up.

Liking Oneself II – Tohda – 6/4/15

Glad you updated this story. I like reading most of your stories. Can’t leave a proper review because honestly, after staying for almost a year (and counting) in a country that barely speaks English, I’m already too tired to actually pinpoint grammar mistakes or the like as I am more grateful that I can finally read something in English. Not that there are much to correct in your stories and there’s really nothing negative I can say about the plot because I wouldn’t read them if the stories weren’t to my liking.

Hope you continue to update your other stories specially “Baby Care Package”, “Touchan Taicho”, “Softly Snowing II: Academy Years”, and “Secret Santa”.

Do keep writing! :)

No worries on that. I do hope to update the others soon though, though Touchan Taicho depends on a few things like getting ST up onto Wattpad so it’s easier to read, writing the next chapter and getting it to EvilHumour

Liking Oneself: De-Zombification – 8/28/14

I really hate what kubo is doing to toshiro! like seriously, why does he torture this poor kid so much! and now even matsumoto is zombiefied, w**?!

hoping for you to continue this story, I think we all need to read something comforting…

Yeah. I feel bad for Toshiro. Now as of posting this Toshiro may have his life span shortened, but that’s only if it actually is Mayuri speaking and not Toshiro. Toshiro saying “my life was cut down many times, but I’m still thankful as he saved my life”. The cutting down of lives refers to the time loop. Sadly the actual Manga volume won’t be released over here for over a year so it seems it will be over a year until confirmation. Can’t find any stories dealing with this detail yet either, but I did find a whopper of a Mary Sue when I tried looking.

Liking Oneself: De-Zombification – 8/13/14

Oh My Gosh. Did he just… s*** his pants… Seriously? Wow, as much as I LOVE your stories and always am impressed by how amazingly you write them, this made me even MORE impressed since I would never thought you’d write something like that! Congratulations! I was literally reading this part with my mouth open from a shock you served there!

I wonder what’s wrong with his brain now. He knows he’s alive, but he’s still afraid of the sun. I can understand he thinks he’s a doll, since GiGi pretty much messed his mind up with making a doll from him by creating a zombie, but being afraid of the sun? Pretty weird idea, but I trust you know what you’re doing – as you always do :)

Hoping for Matsumoto to be the new captain, you just made me believing it’s possible. Plus, the position would stay in the family and Toshiro could take over or the division would have two taichos when he recovers.

Oh! Really nice review with a ton of length. I loved the fact you noticed so many details from the story. Matsumoto being the new captain though… that’s a rather good question. That may have been my plan, but I may have someone else in mind. :)

Secrets are secrets.

Liking Oneself: De-Zombification – 8/4/15

Oooo? This story is good so far. Any updates coming up soon?

Long time, but I do hope to update soon.

Liking Oneself: De-Zombification – 8/1/14

Love the beginning of this story already and can’t wait for more. But I do wonder why is Hitsugaya drooling so much? Are some of his nerves damaged or something? Or is it a side effect of being zombiefied? Poor baby, thanks the spirits he has motherly Matsumoto by his side :)
Why the bunk beds if they’re in her house? Is it because her house is actually a room which is a replacement for her real house that was destroyed during the Quincy attack? Shouldn’t they go someplace safe? I’m not sure if he should feel safe out there, so close to the battlefield… But still, it’s really great they lives together now although I’m not sure if it’s good to degrade him from his captain position. I mean, he’s a prodigy after all. He can have both – childhood and work, right? If Matsumoto took care of the job, he’d be pretty much free and could enojoy life and childhood WITH Matsumoto still with him.
I feel the nightmares coming up and I won’t be surprised to see them really bad. Again – I’m glad Matsumoto’s with him. They share a bond deeper than any other taicho and fukutaicho and I love it. I wish they had more “screen time” in the manga.

Thanks for another story and I’m waiting for more.

Toshiro’s recovering his mental and physical abilities due to being turned into a zombie. Matsumoto’s place is her quarters at the tenth division which consists of one to two rooms. The place has no kitchen, and is very small size wise. Thus there is not any room for more then one bed and thus they need to stack them.

You’re also right that this is degrading for Toshiro, but is he able to understand this at this point? This isn’t to say this isn’t a worry of the adults, but right now they’re more concerned about Toshiro’s basic well being then anything else as well as getting him better.

Liking Oneself – Rawr I’m a Taco – 11/02/13

I really liked this story. It was great for a laugh, and the plot was really good. It could use a bit of work grammar-wise, but other than that, it was great. Keep up the good work in your sequel. :)

The Taco (Oh, and “Rawr I’m a Taco” is my username, I’m just too lazy to log in)

I’m glad you found the story funny and agree with the fact the grammar needs work.


Horseland: Broken Trot

bluelove – 7/26/15

Sweet finish plz its awesome

Story is finished, but I may eventually write a sequel or do something else with the piece.

ceriese – 6/27/14

I hated that you made it about Bailey and Sarah you should have made it about Will and Sarah

No, I shouldn’t have. The readers don’t have any right to dictate what pairings a writer uses in their stories. They can tell the writer that the characters are out of character, and that they can make the pairing more realistic. They can’t though tell them no go on the pairing.

The books make it clear Sarah is eleven and Will is fourteen which means there is a three year age gap between the two. There are legality issues with this kind of pairings. Thus if I am to ever write a story for this pairing I’d be taking the legal issues into consideration for the stories I write. The most obvious solution is to have Sarah graduate high school as she would no longer be a minor, and they don’t have to deal with the fact Will is her teacher at Horseland thus placing him into a position of trust. That’s actually another issue outside of the age gap.

Phocks – 5/22/14

What school? Who’s older sister? What girl? I’m confused. I like Horseland, but I don’t watch it that much.

I believe I was referring to Talia Bentley who goes to Stanhope Academy. She and the other school are major rivals of Horseland in competitions. I created a sister for her to pair with Will because I liked the character dynamics between such a pairing and the potential tension it can bring to other stories.